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  •  Persimma shook her head, hard, and (7+ / 0-)
    some more dead cockroaches fell out of her hair and clattered on the stone floor.   She kicked them out of the way, wishing she had a mirror.  Did she have any eyelashes left after that last fireball?  No way to know.  She raised her fist but the door creaked open before she could pound on it.

    "You again."  The voice throbbed with disbelief and/or revulsion.  But Persimma stuck her sword into the doorway before the speaker could slam it and pushed through it.

    Panting, she stared at the Giant Rat of Sumatra.  He avoided her glare, adjusting his cravat.

    "I'm not going to tell you," he muttered to the elaborate knot.  His whiskers bounced and twitched.

    "I don't have time for this."  Persimma heard the snarl in her own voice.  She SO needed a bath and a big nap.

    "Go away.  I don't have time for this either.  I have other things to do.  I don't have to be part of any damn quest."

    Persimma blinked.  "Do you wish you did?"

    He turned away toward his loom.  "Of course not."

    "What's that you're weaving, then?"

    It was the Jewel of Togwogmagog, immense, resplendent, in silk and  linen.

    "Shut up," said the Rat.  He started to cry, big rat tears that dripped off his long nose.

    •  That is outstanding. (5+ / 0-)
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      GussieFN, WiseFerret, cfk, jabney, Emmet

      Emmet, you've got a great way with a phrase, I'll give you that.  So many choice expressions in here: I love that he mutters into the knot, and especially the big rat tears at the end.  Superb work.

      Saint, n. A dead sinner revised and edited. - Ambrose Bierce

      by pico on Thu Sep 15, 2011 at 07:09:56 PM PDT

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      •  Oh, pico! (4+ / 0-)
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        pico, GussieFN, cfk, WiseFerret

        Thank you so much.

        I was at a great conference a couple weeks ago -- Killer Nashville, for crime writers.  It was awesome.  There were zillions of writers, discussing and arguing and reading from their own and other peoples' work.  Very inspiring.

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