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  •  No need to be rude. (2+ / 0-)
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    kishik, eXtina

    I had to reread that sentence twice because I misread it the first time as well.


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    by jayden on Thu Jun 07, 2012 at 03:53:51 PM PDT

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    •  vclib has a habit of trolling me in (1+ / 0-)
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      all my diaries. That's what happens after the 1000'th time

      "I'm sculpting now. Landscapes mostly." ~ Yogi Bear

      by eXtina on Thu Jun 07, 2012 at 04:38:45 PM PDT

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      •  Agree.... but I had to reread it a second time as (1+ / 0-)
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        well.  I wondered why you would highlight an article from 1982 and then realized you were calling that person a 1982 graduate.  Suggest you use the more typical alumni identification and call him an '82 graduate, given that you have the year range for events right next to the graduation identity.  That would be much clearer.

        btw here is another nit: the word you want is "alumni" not "alumnae."  The latter refers to a group of female graduates of a school, the former is used for male (and, by sexist Latinate gender rules, for mixed groups as well).

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        by madhaus on Thu Jun 07, 2012 at 04:51:11 PM PDT

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        •  The sentence that says 1982 graduate is (0+ / 0-)

          a quote from another story, I won't change someone else's writing. I'm sorry it's confusing.
          Thanks for the tip about the alumni.

          "I'm sculpting now. Landscapes mostly." ~ Yogi Bear

          by eXtina on Thu Jun 07, 2012 at 05:01:04 PM PDT

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          •  There is an excellent way to correct a problem (1+ / 0-)
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            with someone else's unclear writing that you're quoting.  You use brackets to rephrase the unclear portion.  In that case you would write it like this:

            The article, written by ... Horace Mann graduate Amos Kamil ['82], investigates many of the sad tales of alleged abuse between 1978 and 1994, three of the alleged abusers, and how a series of administrators, trustees, teachers, and students allowed it to go on for so long.

            I often use the brackets to add things that aren't clear by quoting one sentence or graf, like adding in first names or people's job titles, but you can also swap things in for clunkier phrasings.  And the ellipsis shows that something's been removed, in this case just 1982.

            But in checking the quote, I see you changed it to '82 anyway.  And thank you for "fixing" the alumnae/alumni usage issue.  :)

            In capitalist America, bank robs you!

            by madhaus on Thu Jun 07, 2012 at 11:31:33 PM PDT

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