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  •  honestly I read much worse writing on HP (4+ / 0-)
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    HoundDog, StrayCat, Nag, leonard145b

    writing that is more noticibly flawed (for example, does not support its statements logically).

    Nothing jumped out at me, conversely, in this piece. Rest assured it is ready right now to be sent out as suggested as you meanwhile, as you say, hone your skills.

    Maybe you should message the poster who made the suggestion asking them if they would consider giving you tips on what needs editiing.

    Maybe there is someone (they know someone) on DK who'd do that for you, if not them.

    seriously nothing jumps out at me. I'm not the best writer without a lot of (self) editing. I'm under the impression that other people's writing flows out of them at a much higher initial quality. But I am a very fluent reader...I know when something is not right. It's very common on HP that I get irritated by the quality, for example.
    Yet nothing here jumps out at me. Style does not distract from content at all. It was a pleasant and quick read
    best wishes to you!

    •  Thanks jplanner. Sometimes I get a really good (3+ / 0-)
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      sfsteach, leonard145b, jplanner

      flow that seems natural.  In this one, I erred by thinking I would save time if I started with the text of two previous post, and a new one, but it got so long I ended up spending hours writing connections, elaborating into too much detail, and ended up with four or five paragraphs in different places that said the same thing.  So think I moved all sort of stuff around so much that it didn't seem to flow and my concentration sagged - so this one seem sort of choppy and awkward tome.

      But I guess I should be flattered when you say,   "honestly I read much worse writing on HP writing that is more noticibly flawed..."  Hey, I better write home to Mom about this one.  The best review I've receive yet.   lol

      The means is the ends in the process of becoming. - Mahatma Gandhi

      by HoundDog on Sun Dec 02, 2012 at 08:09:53 AM PST

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      •  that's happened to me before (0+ / 0-)

        trying to meld two different writings from different times.

        It didn't seem choppy to me. I think it seems choppier to the writer becaues we know where the seams are!

        it was fine.

        I've only written three diaries. THe first one was REc listed...i didn't even know what that meant at the time ;). I think for content more than (barely adequate) style. But the other ones didn't really get read.

        I don't have the perseverance right now to work on it more. But it gives me a taste of how hard people do work on their writing at times (though I didn't know you'd spend hours!).

        so you are very welcome for complement. I like to give them when they are true remembering how very much it meant to me that people liked my first diary.

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