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  •  Rhetorical Praxis (2+ / 0-)
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    fToRrEeEsSt, Tortmaster

    If this comment had been your lede, fleshed out with details from your personal experience with the website, the diary would have been a LOT more convincing than the one you wrote.

    Keep trying, better luck next time.

    •  Well that's the thing! DS I agree (0+ / 0-)

      with you. This author, and I have been looking at a lot of his posts, really should take a journalism class!

      My sage advice: Start with your Most important point , then perhaps restate it so that is will get through. Then flesh it out after an introductory phrase such as "this was my experience...."

      Then end with restating the major point.

      Don't bother to apologize for typos — and especially Don't start a diary with the apology!

      What nobody at all is saying IS worth saying: Don't defend the roll out; agree that it sucks. But spend your energy defending/promoting the underlying law.

      If you can get agreement on anything there is a much greater chance that people will listen to your major point.

      And you may elicit some disagreement with your damning of the roll out from people who have had a better experience — which is all good.

      I'm asking you to believe. Not in my ability to bring about real change in Washington ... *I'm asking you to believe in yours.* Barack Obama

      by samddobermann on Thu Nov 14, 2013 at 03:29:26 PM PST

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    •  Second paragraph: (0+ / 0-)

      "I think it's time we admit it and shift from defending the rollout or qualifying its failure by providing alternatives, and move in our engagements with critics toward defending the ACA as policy and a set of goals instead, conceding that the rollout has been badly botched—and not just on the website."

      Obviously it didn't take and needed to be rewritten.

      -9.63, 0.00
      "Liberty" is deaf, dumb, and useless without life itself.

      by nobody at all on Thu Nov 14, 2013 at 04:15:19 PM PST

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