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  •  Sure... (6+ / 0-)

    Bear this in mind:

    I'm pushing the bleeding edge of research, writing it up, and barely getting paid. I could earn more pushing  fast food.  My ability to keep doing this, day to day, often seems to me in doubt.

    •  You can do it. (2+ / 0-)
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      dolphin777, Pris from LA

      Never give up.  Your work could end up helping to save this planet and everyone and every living thing on it.  Seriously.

      •  TF, you are doing important work.... (4+ / 0-)

        and as far as editing, it is often worth doing.  I enjoy your work as you know from my diaries, and feel passionately about this subject.

        I am not a Strunk and White advocate of cutting to the bone.  Language embellishes and adds texture, as well as personalization. It's a matter of finding a balance, that we all strive to achieve.  

        Since you are in touch with Mikey, ask him if "Constantine's Sword" which is on this subject, is getting any traction.  I wrote this reviewon IMDB that Jame Carroll appreciated, even though the producer Jacobi, only noticed the minor criticism.

        That film would be powerful if it ever got distribution.

        Keep up the good work, and it is appreciated by many.

        •  I think "Constantine's Sword" is doing OK.... (0+ / 0-)

          I don't know gross sales receipts though.

          One of these days I'd like to have a talk with Mr. Carroll. He's a good and wise man, and keenly intelligent.

          •  Also - I actually almost never do "edited"... (2+ / 0-)
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            arodb, godislove

            Writing. I'm going to start soon, but for $

            dKos doesn't pay. If this forum gave me frontpage space, I'd edit my writing, sure.

            But, I know what it is to edit - indeed, the last 'edited' piece I did wound up as an LA Times op-ed.

            (after more edits ! - I drafted it, did a number of edits, then it passed onto a former NYT writer who did more edits...)

            •  Congrats for LA Times OpEd... (2+ / 0-)
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              Troutfishing, godislove

              the closest I got was one published in the San Diego Union Tribune.  And the subject wasn't saving the political system, but getting more tennis courts in the community.

              I used to get several N.Y. Times Letters published, about 14 over a decade or so.  Brevity was important, so like a Haiku I worked on making the direct point concisely. Usually they work with the writer to pare it down getting approval of any edits.

              In one letter about police brutality the editor simply chopped off the last paragraph, destroying what made the letter worthwhile.  When I complained he said I should have been happy since mine was selected out of hundreds submitted.

              It takes a lot of work to write a substantive diary, and even more work to edit it down to the ideal form. You seem to hit the recommend list frequently, which provides some satisfaction, but it doesn't pay the rent.

              So, I understand your reaction to "constructive criticism."  Drop me the link to the OpEd if you feel like it.

              Regards

              Al

              •  Here it is, but I can't call it "mine" anymore... (2+ / 0-)
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                arodb, godislove

                I just did the initial drafts which I edited a number of times... Chris Rodda threw in some nice points too.

                Then Reza had at and it the piece, with Mikey throwing in points too, and in the end it was no longer recognizable as mine... it was a group effort. Somebody else, in a PR firm working for MRFF, coined the gem of a phrase "The Rapture Is Not A Viable Exit Strategy". That's the making of the sausage.

                Anyway, here's the final product which - I'd say - was indeed better than my version although there were some flourishes I liked which got edited out. Probably for good reason. It's not considered genteel to mention that the use of the word "crusade" in the context of Middle Eastern politics is generally not a good idea for, among other reasons, the fact that the Crusaders were known for, among other charming behaviors, occasional savage bouts of cannibalism (when food was lacking) that in one case involved skewering and barbecuing children and cooking adults in big stew pots. Ah, the Crusades !

                http://www.latimes.com/...

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