This Obama web ad is good, but too long for TV
Here's a suggestion for a 30 second TV version. This will probably flow best if you just read the text on your first pass.
I'm Barack Obama and I approve this message [2 sec]
[introductory slide] Recently, Mitt Romney held a high dollar fundraiser behind closed doors [2 sec]
[Romney] There are 47 percent of the people who will vote for the president no matter what. [4 sec]
[Romney] who believe that they are victims [2 sec]
[commoner 1] It shows that he's out of touch, if he thinks that half of the country is feeling like victims [6 sec]
[Romney] who believe that they are entitled to health care, to food, to housing, to you-name-it. [5 sec]
[commoner 2] I don't think that anybody is ever looking for a handout. I think that we all want chances and opportunities. [6 sec]
[Romney] my job is not to worry about those people. [3 sec]